Two points of view

Posted by Claudia Moser on 1:47 PM in ,
First person point of view

I waited on my chair, listening to the silence which encompassed the beauty parlor, wondering where Vicky was. I was so dissapointed, felt like I trusted someone with my deepest secrets who did not deserve. I hope so much that Vicky will take over the shop after I would retire, having someone to continue my hard work's investment. Thirty years and now nothing, emptiness, no one to greet me in the morning, no one to check with when coming up with new ideas.

I am so lost since I don't understand why Vicky treated me like she did. I am looking down at the bags which I packed for her, her clothes, her cosmetics products, her shoes, everything I bought for her. So many hours invested in her, teaching her how to be a good beautician, the best, after me.

Where is she? I should open the shop soon, my first customer comes in 30 minutes, another busy day ...

Vicky decided to be a teacher, I wonder if that is a good idea, with me she had a future, a safe one, good customers, a background, something which she could develop, for her and her son.

But no! That was not good enough for her! This disturbing feeling I have, knowing she had taken money from me which did not belong to her.

Oh, here she is! Let's get this done with!

Third person point of view

Vicky entered the room and noticed Hanna sitting on her chair, all concerned, in a negative mood. She knew that this is going to be a  hard discussion, but she did not expect that her things were already packed. Somehow she knew she should not say anything, she should not dwell on the past. How could she explain that she felt trapped in a dream that did not belong to her? She wanted to be a teacher and the beautician job was just a passing through moment in her life, but Hanna wanted more. She was grateful of what she received, do much knowledge, understanding, maybe even a sense of belonging. But she had to draft her own future, for her and her son. And she had a great opportunity to study, but she felt sadness. She hoped that the door towards Hanna's friendship will remain open, but that was not the case. They have to part, for good!



WOW this is poignant!! THIS IS GREAT..(i think i'm getting it now) LOL

Very well done, Claudia. If only try to look at things from another person's POV, how different the world would be.

Very clever! Interesting to hear it from both points of view. One person always has to feel disappointed!

@Brenda - thank you so much for your kind words!
@Corinne - that is true, sometimes we are so entamgled in our own life that we lose perspective!
@Diane - thank you, it is a sad story, based on a true event actually!

I have seen that story play out in my life. It is always difficult to understand why someone else's dream doesn't fit you, but a blessing to accept it.
Same for the mentor, acceptance is key.

I enjoyed getting both points of view. Certainly a crossroads in their relationship and how intersting that both came to the conclusion that their relationship was "over". Can't decide wihch I like better although the 3rd person read smoother. Nice work!

Dearest Claudia,
I found this post very interesting to read. Our relationship with others are so complicated and as you said entangled (^^;)
Sending you lots of love and hugs from Japan, xoxo Miyako*

@Jo - yes, but it is hard to make this step, to accept the mentee's decision!
@Amy - thank you so much for your kind words, the second one came easier, I agree
@Miyako - sometimes it is not easy to decide what to do

It really is one of the biggest steps of growing up, doing what is right for YOU and not the dream of another. Enjoyed reading this. :)

@Elizabeth - thank you!

Very interesting read. The two pieces work together.

Interesting piece. Not only did you change point of view in terms of first or third person, but also it was cool to get the other characters perception. Well done.


@Tara - thank you
@Joyce - I am happy you like it!

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